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The old man with the enormous wing were thought to be an angel. An angel is a wing creature sent from the heave to do God's will on the earth. In the story, however, the wing man rarely does direct miracles. And when he does, it does not turn out to be an effective on. Since he does have the capable of doing miracles, the wing man may be considered an angel. "the paralytic who didn't get to walk but almost won the lottery" (Marquez p.454). In that quotation, the angel may does a miracle, but not quite what the man needed the most. Furthermore, there is no direct proof that he is the one that causes it. He may have wings, and have the capability to make miracle; however, it is doubtful that he is sent by God to do His will.

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